| |
Site Navigation
Main
News
Forums
Games
Games Database
Top 100
Release List
Support Files
Features
Reviews
Previews
Interviews
Editorials
Diaries
Misc
Download
Gallery
Music
Screenshots
Videos
Miscellaneous
Staff Members
Privacy Statement
|
|
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
More Samuel continuation:
DIA_Addon_Samuel_Francis_14_10
We were on guard duty together, once. A nodded off, as usual, and he started murmuring about in his sleep.
We were on guard duty together once. A nodded off as usual, and he started murmuring about in his sleep.
#We were on guard duty together once. He nodded off as usual, and started murmuring aloud in his sleep.
DIA_Addon_Samuel_Grog_14_01
You guys lads don't lift a finger without grog, eh? Right you are.
You lads can't lift a finger without grog, eh? Right you are.
#You lads won't lift a finger without grog, eh? Right you are.
[The meaning of the phrase 'won't/don't lift a finger' is more coll. English. It means 'refuse to help or do work'. So using *can't* changes the meaning away from that phrase. I do see you caught the guys lads repeat.]
DIA_Addon_Samuel_Rum_14_02
The rum might taste of fish a little. We only have old herring barrels here. But rum stays rum. Enjoy!
The rum might taste a little fishy. We only have old herring barrels here, but rum stays rum. Enjoy!
??The rum may have some fishy taste. We only have old herring barrels here, but rum stays rum. Enjoy!
[The phrase 'tast a little fishy' that you wish to use is actually coll. English! It means that "something is wrong with it."  By writing the way I wrote it, it keeps that confusion away, emphasizing it really does taste like fish!]
UPDATE: Then my version sounds boring and ruins the flow? Second thought, I would stay with your version. I just wanted to point this curiousity out.
[But what the heck, maybe your phrase is good enough. In a way, it kill two birds with one stone. I will leave it up to you and others opinion. Your version has a better 'flow' to it, even though it does run into that phrase thing. The next sentence does clear it up, it says the rum was in herring fish barrels.]
DIA_Addon_Samuel_Stronger_LousDoubleHammer_14_01
Don't make yourself miserable shorty. I hope it's not for yourself.
Don't make yourself a miserable shorty. I hope it's not for yourself.
#I hope it's not for yourself; it will quickly make you miserably drunk!
[Typo. 'miserable shortly' not a sad short person 'falling down drunk']
[If not, the I would say it anyway to clarify it.]
?Don't make yourself a falling down drunk. I hope it's not for yourself.
DIa_Addon_Samuel_Stronger_LousDoubleHammer_14_02
(ferocious) YES! That let's the spirit dance!
(ferocious) YES! Then let the spirit dance!
[spirit here is not a ghost but 'liquior' is known also as 'spirits'. Dance is a excited word play ''Drink it up and makes your throat burn" You do the 'dance' after drinking a strong shot of liquior. Spirit dance is a play on words.]
To clarify : @(ferocious) YES! Then drink up the liquior!
??(ferocious) YES! Then let the liquior dance!
DIA_Addon_Samuel_Trade_14_01
I supply everything, a pirate needs to survive!
I provide everything a pirate needs to survive!
#I supply everything a pirate needs to survive!
DIA_Addon_Samuel_News_14_02
You are alright. Here, we'll have a drink on the house!
% ?
{ I haven't played that part yet, but they sit on the house and drink? }
@You're a cool dude. Here, we'll have a drink on the house!
#You're alright. Here, we'll have a drink on the house!
[No.  ]
["have a drink on the house!" is another coll. English phrase. It means the drink is free. The tavern gives the drink for free. Thus the phrase: "It's on the house." means a business is giving away a sample of something for free.]
The hardest part of English for non-native speakers is all these colloquial phrases. And German uses them also to great confusion. All languages do, I would venture to guess.
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
Mon Aug 23, 2004 1:20 am |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
DIA_Addon_Samuel_Rum_14_02
The rum might taste of fish a little. We only have old herring barrels here. But rum stays rum. Enjoy!
The rum might taste a little fishy. We only have old herring barrels here, but rum stays rum. Enjoy!
??The rum may have some fishy taste. We only have old herring barrels here, but rum stays rum. Enjoy!
[The phrase 'tast a little fishy' that you wish to use is actually coll. English! It means that "something is wrong with it." By writing the way I wrote it, it keeps that confusion away, emphasizing it really does taste like fish!]
Tastes suspicious .... didn't you find it odd? The expression to which you are referring is "sounds fishy" or "smells fishy".
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
DIa_Addon_Samuel_Stronger_LousDoubleHammer_14_02
(ferocious) YES! That let's the spirit dance!
(ferocious) YES! Then let the spirit dance!
To clarify : @(ferocious) YES! Then drink up the liquior!
??(ferocious) YES! Then let the liquior dance!
My version is a pun. Both meanings work in this sentence. Either way is fine with me, nevertheless.
__________________________________________
Eremit
I think noone checked this guy.
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_01
I went to the most remote part of the island, because I wanted some peace!
I've chosen the remotest part of the island because I want some peace!
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_02
Civil war, marauding bandits, hoards of orcs on my doormat ...
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_03
That wasn't for me. Not anymore. I drop out of all that madness.
They aren't for me. Not anymore. I drop out of all this madness.
{ Personally I don't like the phrase "drop out"... Yes, "withdraw"... but }
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_05
And other people are - praised be Innos - nowhere to be seen. (grumpy) Until today.
And other people are - praised be Innos - nowhere to be seen. (grumpy) Until now.
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_15_02
I am searching for stone tablets. You haven't found any by any chance?
I am searching for stone tablets. Didn't you find any by chance?
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_06
(carfully) well yes ... But I will keep them!
(carefully) Well, yes ... But I'm keeping them!
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_07
They are the only thing out here, that I get to read.
The tablets are the only things I get to read here.
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_15_01
A have some rags for you ...
A => I
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_24
Great. First raise my expectatoins and then ... (sighs)
Great. First I raised my expectations and then ... (sighs)
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_15_04
Well? What's life like as a drop-out?
Well? What is it like to be a hermit?
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_10
I cam here with nothing but my good mood ...
I came here with nothing but good mood ...
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_13
I know nothing of weaving or the treating of furs ...
I've known nothing about weaving or treating furs ...
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_14
And the nights aren't exactly warm in this part of the island.
And in this part of the island, it isn't very warm at night.
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_15
I get by.
???
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_18
With those clothes I 'll get through winter! After that ... we'll see ...
I will get through this winter with these clothes! After that ... we'll see ...
_____________________________
DIA_Addon_Henry_WantEnter_04_04
Here in the camp are A LOT of things that might be of interest to you ...
Here in the camp there are MANY things that might be of interest to you ...
DIA_Addon_Henry_WantEnter_04_09
Or could it be that those fine clothes are stolen?
Or maybe those fine clothes are stolen?
{ "could it be that" is wordy and interrupts the sentence flow. }
DIA_Addon_Henry_Add_04_01
The capt'n is out on a sea raid with half the crew. And he is the only one who decides about taking on new people ...
capt'n => Capt'n
DIA_Addon_Henry_MeatForMorgan_15_02
Alligator Jack. He says that Morgan is waiting for it already.
Alligator Jack. He says that Morgan has been waiting for it.
DIA_Addon_Henry_BaltramPack_15_00
I have a delivery for Skip. Is he there?
there => here
DIA_Addon_Henry_Tribut_04_02
You braught me a message from our lumberjacks.
braught => brought
DIA_Addon_Henry_Tribut_04_04
You have packet for Skip.
packet => a packet
DIA_Addon_Henry_Tribut_Add_04_03
I tell you what. You can go in for free,
Tell you what, you can go in for free.
DIA_Addon_Henry_Tribut_04_05
...or you bugger off again. It's that simple.
... or you bugger off again. It's that simple.
DIA_Addon_Henry_Tribut_nein_04_03
Come now, I already made it cheaper for you.
I already => I've already
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_WhatFor_04_02
The bastards are becoming more and more cheeky. They have been circling around our camp for days now. Like sharks around a man lost at seas.
becoming => getting
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_Bandits_04_11
(whimsical) A shame really, that you won't be able to hear it, as you haven't paid your toll yet.
really, that => really that
DIA_Addon_Henry_Entercrew_Add_04_01
First we'll have a little talk, if I should let you into the camp at all!
First => First,; talk, if => talk if
DIA_Addon_Henry_Owen_04_01
It's been days since we expected timber for the plaisades to arrive.
plaisades => palisades
DIA_Addon_Henry_Owen_04_05
Malcom and Owen should long ago have delivered it.
"long ago" ... Put it at the end of the sentence ...
DIA_Addon_Henry_Owen_04_06
They lumbrejack's camp is not far from here, in the basin sout-east.
They => The; sout-east => southeast
DECLINE: lumbrejack's => lumberjack's
DIA_Addon_Henry_Owen_04_08
Tell them, that we are waiting for the timber!
No comma
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_CanHelp_04_01
Do you have expereince with erecting palisades?
expereince => experience
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_CanHelp_04_04
UH! Get off your face, for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
face, => face
DIA_Addon_Henry_Add_04_04
The capt'n gave you your own boarding party, didn't he?
capt'n => Capt'n
DIA_Addon_Henry_CommentFightSkill_04_03
Remember, who parries lives longer!
Remember: he who parries, lives longer!
DECLINE
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_Train_04_06
His deputy is called Fancis.
DECLINE: called Fancis => named Francis
@Edith calls for removal of some personal comments and addition of Eremit and Henry. |
|
Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:42 am |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
#The rum might taste a little fishy. We only have old herring barrels here, but rum stays rum. Enjoy!
[I do agree, your version is better.]
As for the let the 'spirits dance', I understand it, and if you like it, and others understand it too, then it is good enough for me. 
I can look over Emirrit and Henry, posted here later; a cursorary glance seems you got it corrected well enough.
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
|
Mon Aug 23, 2004 3:02 pm |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_02
Civil war, marauding bandits, hoards of orcs on my doormat ...
#Civil war, marauding bandits, hoards of orcs at my door mat ...
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_03
That wasn't for me. Not anymore. I drop out of all that madness.
They aren't for me. Not anymore. I drop out of all this madness.
{ Personally I don't like the phrase "drop out"... Yes, "withdraw"... but }
#That wasn't for me. Not anymore. I escaped all that madness.
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_15_02
I am searching for stone tablets. You haven't found any by any chance?
I am searching for stone tablets. Didn't you find any by chance?
#I'm searching for stone tablets. Have you found any by chance?
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_24
Great. First raise my expectatoins and then ... (sighs)
Great. First I raised my expectations and then ... (sighs)
#Great. At first, I had my hopes up high, and then ... (sighs)
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_10
I cam here with nothing but my good mood ...
I came here with nothing but good mood ...
#I came here with nothing but only my good mood ...
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_13
I know nothing of weaving or the treating of furs ...
I've known nothing about weaving or treating furs ...
# I know nothing about weaving clothes or tanning furs to wear...
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_14
And the nights aren't exactly warm in this part of the island.
And in this part of the island, it isn't very warm at night.
#And the nights here aren't exactly warm on this part of the island.
[Leave this. It explains the next sentence. He does not know how to make clothes to wear, and he is freezing cold at night.]
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_15
I get by.
???
[Somehow he gets by (staying warm at night)]
@But I manage to survive the nights.
@I manage to survive.
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_18
With those clothes I 'll get through winter! After that ... we'll see ...
I will get through this winter with these clothes! After that ... we'll see ...
#With decent clothes I can get through the winter! After you get some for me ... we'll see about the tablets ...
[He wants the Hero to go get him some clothes to survive the winter. After that, then the Hermit will give him some of his stone tablets he found.]
_____________________________
DIA_Addon_Henry_WantEnter_04_09
Or could it be that those fine clothes are stolen?
Or maybe those fine clothes are stolen?
{ "could it be that" is wordy and interrupts the sentence flow. }
[I would stay with the original, there is a deeper meaning.]
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_CanHelp_04_04
UH! Get off your face, for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
face, => face
???UH! Get off your face for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
[What is he saying? UH! Get off your face?]
[UH! Go *** yourself for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers!]
@UH! Go do what you want for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers!
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
|
Mon Aug 23, 2004 3:21 pm |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
DIA_Addon_Eremit_Add_04_02
Civil war, marauding bandits, hoards of orcs on my doormat ...
#Civil war, marauding bandits, hoards of orcs at my door mat ...
Didn't know why my version is wiped out. I prefer "on my doorstep", and yes, the word "doormat" does exist.
____________________________
Skip
Mostly minor spelling mistakes.
DIA_Addon_Skip_NW_WerBistDu_ja_08_02
Oh crap! I was consiering if I should wander over to the ciy.
consiering => considering; ciy => city
DIA_Addon_Skip_NW_WerBistDu_ja_08_04
The milita would've probably locked my up straight away.
my => me
DIA_Addon_Skip_NW_Woher_08_05
The island of Khorinis is big and where we are is unaccessible for anyone anyway. Unless that is, you have a cog or a ship.
unaccessible => inaccessible
DIA_Addon_Skip_SCSawGreg_15_02
Therw is someone roaming the land of Khorinis and he seems to know you well.
Therw => There
DIA_Addon_Skip_NW_MissingPeople_08_05
Only later did they start to kidnap the city's citicens. No idea what the want with them.
citicens => citizens; the => they
DIA_Addon_Skip_NW_Wohin_08_01
I told you already that I won't give away the location of our bay.
I => I've
DIA_Addon_Skip_ADW_GregGetroffen_08_04
(sighs) But definetely not today. I only just arrived.
definetely => definitely; I => I've
DIA_Addon_Skip_Bandits_08_09
But when entered the swamp, the bastards started attacking me!
when entered => when I entered (missed a subject)
DIA_Addon_Skip_ArmorPrice_15_00
I need a bandits armor.
bandits armor => Bandit's Armor
DIA_Addon_Skip_GregsHut_15_00
Any idea who I could get into the hut?
who I could => how could I
DIA_Addon_Skip_GregsHut_08_03
When he left, he gave Francis the key and order that NOBODY was to enter the hut.
order => ordered
DIA_Addon_Skip_Francis_08_03
Even though none of the boys here take him serious.
serious => seriously
DIA_Addon_Skip_Raven_15_00
Have ever met Raven?
Have ever => Have you ever (missed subject)
DIA_Addon_Skip_AngusnHank_08_05
Morgand and Bill went looking for them - without result.
Morgand => Morgan |
|
Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:11 pm |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
Didn't know why my version is wiped out. I prefer "on my doorstep", and yes, the word "doormat" does exist.
-----------------------
Oh, OK. Not a big deal. Keep it as "on my doorstep" is fine. I just never hear door mat very much. My fault. 
Looks like your corrections to Skip are all OK. Good job! 
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
|
Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:57 pm |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
Bill
His script is well done, as well. Only minor spelling mistakes.
DIA_Addon_Bill_Planks_03_01
They are fpr the palisades, you oaf!
fpr => for
DIA_Addon_Bill_Planks_03_06
If I had know all this before, I would've stayed in Khorinis.
know => known
DIA_Addon_Bill_AngusnHank_03_01
(sighs) I have no idea wher they are - I guess that bandits got them.
wher => where
DECLINE: that => the
DIA_Addon_Bill_AngusnHank_03_03
All I know is, that they wanted to meet with some bandits in a cave nearby.
No comma
DIA_Addon_Bill_FoundFriends_03_03
(hateful) That was those cursed badits!
badits => bandits
DECLINE: That => It
DIA_Addon_Bill_Khorinis_03_03
I couldn't see a point anymore in running from the milita for a few pennies worth.
milita => militia
DIA_Addon_Bill_Khorinis_03_05
(sighs) Sawing all day long to build a plaisade, that's of no use anyway.
plaisade => palisade
DIA_Addon_Bill_TeachPlayer_03_02
But you have to be at least moderatly dextrous, or there is no point.
moderatly => moderately
DIA_Addon_Bill_LearnTalent_15_00
Show me pickpocketing.
pickpocketing => pickpocketting (few dialogues before, double -tt- is used)
__________________________
Garett
In progress |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 2:19 am |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
 Hey, so far, so good!
What happened with that one phrase awhile back. The 'houses are increased'?
I meant to show that they mean the houses are 'high up in the air' (altitude). As located upon a high bluff or mountain. It can also mean that they are huge in size, but I think the whole sentence used them as "The houses sit high up in the air, there is an entrance at the top of a long stairway leading up to it, with giant columns lining the way."
Who was that? I do not know if it was ever corrected. Water mage? I don't remember.
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 2:41 am |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
Riordian
DIA_Addon_Riordian_WhereAreHouses_10_05
They are increased. Steep stairs lead into the entrance covered by high columns.
The houses sit high up in the air, there is an entrance at the top of a long stairway leading up to it, with giant columns lining the way.
Xerxes712
____________________________________
And another one:
DIA_Addon_Greg_NW_Hallo_vorsicht_01_01
(exaggertedly modest) My, I am not the kind of acquaintance, a good sir like yourself is accomodated to.
???
Yes, I could tell the meaning from the sentence. It's just that, at first glance, the preposition "to" seems to lead to nowhere. I understand it leads to "acquaintance"; however, it would be impossible for me to do such a job within two seconds (i.e. when I'm playing the game).
___________________________________
As for "some of the buggers"... are you referring to only "some of the" or the entire phrase? If you are referring the former, then consider the following line:
DIA_Addon_Garett_Samuel_09_04
Some of the lads here aren't exactly welcoming to new boys, if you know what I mean ...
I actually like the use of "some of the" here as Garrett knows who the lads are.
___________________________________
On a second thought, can we swear in the mod?
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_CanHelp_04_04
UH! Get off your face, for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
face, => face
?UH! Go ...
... yourself for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
Xerxes712
I know what "get off your face" means, it's just that I like yours better.
=====================================
Garett
Not bad, though I do have some concern for this one.
DIA_Addon_Garett_Anheuern_09_00
Don't even think about asking me if I join your boarding aprty.
DECLINE: if I join your boarding aprty. => if I want to join your boarding party.
DIA_Addon_Garett_Anheuern_09_01
What do you think will the boys do when I'm gone, huh?
What do you think the boys will do when I'm gone, huh?
DIA_Addon_Garett_Anheuern_09_03
I'm staying here and look after the supplies!
look => looking
{ Or ... "I must stay here to look after the supplies!" }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Hello_09_01
I am Garett. If you happen to need anything, come to me first.
Garett => Garrett
DIA_Addon_Garett_Hello_09_02
I can get you almost anything. Wine, weapons and much of the other things people need.
anything. Wine => anything: wine
{ My dictionary states that "wine" can be BOTH countable and uncountable, so I'm not sure about plurality. }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Warez_09_02
Unitl recently, he used to sell considerable amounts to the bandits.
Unitl => Until
{ "amount" is uncountable; however, my guts tell me this is correct. }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Greg_09_06
Greg, the bastard, took it off me, of course.
{ Not sure if I should [off => off from]. Sounds better but wordy. }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Tips_09_01
Greg told me once death was watching over my compass and then laughed at me.
{ Here is my first interpretation of this sentence:
@Greg told me: Once death watches over my compass, then Greg will laugh at me. }
?Greg told me once, that death was watching over my compass. He laughed at me afterwards.
{ However, mine is extremely choppy. Hate that. }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Tips_09_04
It's said that greg used to go there sometimes. Maybe you can find something there.
greg => Greg
DIA_Addon_Garett_Tips_09_05
I had a look myself once, but the are is full of monsters.
the are is => that beach was
DIA_Addon_Garett_GiveKompass_09_01
(rejoices) Yes, that's it. I didn't expect to ever see it again.
to ever see it => to see it ever
{ Don't split infinitives. -_- }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Francis_09_04
Henry and his boys are the only ones here, who actually do something.
here, who => who; something => something here
{ "who" modifies "here" in this sentence. }
DIA_Addon_Garett_Francis_09_05
The others just have a good day instead of working.
just have => are just having
DIA_Addon_Garett_Francis_09_06
I only haope that Greg is back soon.
haope => hope
DIA_Addon_Garett_PERM_09_02
Since Greg left, nothing at all is happening here.
is => has been
________________________________________
Hammer Pirate
DIA_Addon_HammerPirate_Success_07_02
I go once again to the camp. We see ourselves!
I'm going back to the camp. See you soon!
{ Or "I'm back to the camp once again! See you soon!" Dunno ...... }
__________________________________
Saw Pirate
DIA_Addon_SawPirate_ComeOn_09_02
(To himself) why couldn't he ask the OTHER ...
(to himself) Why couldn't he ask the OTHER ...
DIA_Addon_SawPirate_GoHome_09_02
That just pisses me off. I will once again return back.
That just pisses me off. I'm going back again once again.
DIA_Addon_SawPirate_Success_09_02
I go back to the camp. Hopefully we never see each other again!
I'm going back to the camp. Hopefully we'll never see each other again!
____________________________________
Bones
DIA_Addon_Bones_Hello_01_01
Oh well, I get along ok. It's a little boring, but at least I don't have to work.
ok => well
DIA_Addon_Bones_Work_01_01
I'm just preparing the next task which Greg has given me.
I'm just preparing the next task Greg has given me.
DIA_Addon_Bones_Work_01_04
No offense, kid. I have worked hard for the privilege of this job, and have no desire to lose it.
{ Not sure if "privilege" is the right word. Maybe [privilege => honour to take]? }
DIA_Addon_Bones_Teacher_01_07
All of Henrys people are equipped with two handed weapons.
Henrys => Henry's; two handed => two-handed
DIA_Addon_Bones_Teacher_01_08
Morgan prefers the faster one hand weapons.
one hand => one-handed
DIA_Addon_Bones_Teacher_01_11
However I am quite certain that Alligator Jack or Samuel can yet show you another trick or two.
However, I am quite certain that Alligator Jack and Samuel can still show you another trick or two.
DIA_Addon_Bones_Francis_01_03
Just look around. The only people who are doing something, are Henry and his boys.
No comma
DIA_Addon_Bones_Francis_01_04
Morgan spends the whole day either lying in bed, or get himself boozed up.
DECLINE: get => getting
DIA_Addon_Bones_Francis_01_05
Of Greg, he does give a damn. Whoever doesn't step to it, gets a kick in the ass!
???
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_15_00
Give me the bandit armor.
bandit armor => Bandit's Armor
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_01_01
I'm not crazy yet. Greg would tear my head off.
get rid of "yet"
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_01_02
He specifically said that without his command no one gets the armor.
He said specifically: Without his command, no one will ever get the armor.
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_01_03
I can not give it to you. Especially not now as he is back.
can not => cannot
DIA_Addon_Bones_GiveArmor_15_00
Greg commands you should give me the bandits' armor.
bandits' armor => Bandit's Armor
DECLINE: should => to
DIA_Addon_Bones_GiveArmor_01_02
This scout job into the bandits camp is pure suicide.
bandits camp => bandit camp
DIA_Addon_Bones_GiveArmor_01_03
Rather I fetch the prison guard of Greg than let those bandits kill me.
Rather I => I would rather |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 3:05 am |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
DIA_Addon_Greg_NW_Hallo_vorsicht_01_01
(exaggertedly modest) My, I am not the kind of acquaintance, a good sir like yourself is accomodated to.
???
Yes, I could tell the meaning from the sentence. It's just that, at first glance, the preposition "to" seems to lead to nowhere. I understand it leads to "acquaintance"; however, it would be impossible for me to do such a job within two seconds (i.e. when I'm playing the game).
[This fancy, flamboyant talk can confuse people unless they are very well versed in English nuance.]
Maybe make it simplier by reverse the sentence:
#(exaggertedly modest) My, a good sir like yourself is not accomodated to my kind of acquaintance...
___________________________________
As for "some of the buggers"... are you referring to only "some of the" or the entire phrase? If you are referring the former, then consider the following line:
DIA_Addon_Garett_Samuel_09_04
Some of the lads here aren't exactly welcoming to new boys, if you know what I mean ...
I actually like the use of "some of the" here as Garrett knows who the lads are.
In the end, it does not matter, we tend to use alot of slang in English. We tend to say "some of the buggers" instead of more proper English 'some buggers'. If you like the proper version better, it will be understood by everyone.
___________________________________
Garett
[I can offer some suggestions and comments]
DIA_Addon_Garett_Anheuern_09_03
I'm staying here and look after the supplies!
look => looking
{ Or ... "I must stay here to look after the supplies!" }
[Your correct. He is a trader in goods, he must stay there to watch over his supplies.]
DIA_Addon_Garett_Hello_09_01
I am Garett. If you happen to need anything, come to me first.
Garett => Garrett
[Yes, that is the most correct common spelling in English.]
DIA_Addon_Garett_Hello_09_02
I can get you almost anything. Wine, weapons and much of the other things people need.
anything. Wine => anything: wine
{ My dictionary states that "wine" can be BOTH countable and uncountable, so I'm not sure about plurality. }
[Correct. Both the plural and singular form of 'Wine' is 'Wine', the same.]
DIA_Addon_Garett_Warez_09_02
Unitl recently, he used to sell considerable amounts to the bandits.
Unitl => Until
{ "amount" is uncountable; however, my guts tell me this is correct. }
[Correct, but we definitely here would use *amounts* in colloquial English.]
[ But the proper English usage of this word is as follows.]
#Until recently, he used to sell a considerable amount to the bandits.
DIA_Addon_Garett_Greg_09_06
Greg, the bastard, took it off me, of course.
{ Not sure if I should [off => off from]. Sounds better but wordy. }
["took it off me" is slang. It means stole it from him using force. Since it is slang, I leave the phrase as *took it off me* because *took it off from me* is not the slang phrase being employed here.]
[It is best to leave it as it is with the slang. Else, it must be spelled out to make sense. "Of course that bastard Greg took it from me." ]
#Of course that bastard Greg took it from me.
This works if you like this version without the slang.
DIA_Addon_Garett_Tips_09_01
Greg told me once death was watching over my compass and then laughed at me.
{ Here is my first interpretation of this sentence:
@Greg told me: Once death watches over my compass, then Greg will laugh at me. }
?Greg told me once, that death was watching over my compass. He laughed at me afterwards.
{ However, mine is extremely choppy. Hate that. }
[It is slang again. A play on words. It means that 'fate (his death) is watching over him (his 'direction' in life). That is where the compass reference comes into play (plus pirates ride in ships). Greg then laughs immediately after he said that just to spook him (Garrett).]
#Greg told me once, death was watching over my fate, and then he just laughed about it.
DIA_Addon_Garett_Francis_09_05
The others just have a good day instead of working.
just have => are just having
#The others just party all day instead of working.
DIA_Addon_Garett_PERM_09_02
Since Greg left, nothing at all is happening here.
is => has been
@Since Greg left, no work has gotten done around here.
#Since Greg left, nothing has gotten done around here.
-----------------------------------------------------
On a second thought, can we swear in the mod?
[Yes, to a point.]
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_CanHelp_04_04
UH! Get off your face, for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
face, => face
?UH! Go [have sexual relationship with] yourself for all I care, but don't get in the way of my workers.
Xerxes712
I know what "get off your face" means, it's just that I like yours better.
[It would be a good time for a modest 'dirty word' to be put in there.]
Hammer and Saw Pirate coming soon: 
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut?
Last edited by Xerxes712 on Tue Aug 24, 2004 5:19 am; edited 1 time in total |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 5:07 am |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
[It would be a good time for a modest 'dirty word' to be put in there.]
So, "screw" is okay for G2 ...
DIA_Lee_StillNeedYou_04_02
You know what, screw you. First you say I should come, then you send me away again.
Okay, you know what I'm gonna do...
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
Hammer and Saw Pirate coming soon:
Don't forget Bones. Here are Random, Roast, and Bench Pirates. And so is Matt:
_______________________________
Random Pirate Number 7
DIA_Addon_Pir_7_Hello_07_06
If Greg does not come back soon, so I can finially get my sea legs back, I will become land sick.
I need my sea legs back. If Greg does not come back soon, I will become land sick.
{ Slight run-on. }
__________________________________
Random Pirate Number 6
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_GimmeGrog_06_01
Hey you, got a Grog for me?
Grog => grog
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_GimmeGrog_DontHaveAny_06_00
Shit, I will die of thirst yet.
Shit, I'm gonna die of thirst.
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_SeichtesWasser_06_01
I must attend to the gluttonous crew here.
I must meet the gluttonous crew here.
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_SeichtesWasser_06_02
That's why I stand here all day and night, roasting wolf.
That's why I'm standing here all day long, roasting wolf.
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_Francis_06_04
If you ask me, he's screwing us all. I bet, he's works for his own pocket.
If you ask me, he's screwing us all. I bet he works for his own pocket.
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_Chef_06_01
With Greg's return, will surely mean more work; but at least we get enough money.
Greg's return will surely mean more work, but at least we get enough money.
__________________________________
Bench Pirate
DIA_Addon_BenchPirate_ComeOn_15_01
The Canyon is waiting.
Canyon => canyon
DIA_Addon_BenchPirate_ComeOn_07_02
Exactly! Yes, I go back THERE ...
Exactly! Yes, I'm going back THERE ...
___________________________________
Roast Pirate
None!
___________________________________
Matt
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_07_02
I return to the camp!
I'm returning to the camp!
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_07_03
I and the boys return to the camp!
I and the boys are returning to the camp!
{ "The boys and I" ?? }
DIA_Addon_Matt_Hello_10_01
New here, huh? Good. We can use each man we can get!
{ each => every ? }
DIA_Addon_Matt_Job_10_03
For the moment it is quiet in the camp. Now I can relax for awhile.
for awhile => for a while
DIA_Addon_Matt_Job_10_04
And if I was in your place, I would recommend the same for you to do.
to do => too
DIA_Addon_Matt_Bandits_10_01
You mean except that they are dangerous murders and numerically far superior to us?
murders => murderers
DIA_Addon_Matt_FollowMe_ClearCanyon_15_00
We should clear out the Canyon.
Canyon => canyon
DIA_Addon_Matt_GoHome_10_01
(moan to himself) I need a good sip of grog!
moan => moans
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_10_01
You can continue from here alone, (cynical) Capt'n.
Starting from here, you can move on by yourself, (cynical) Capt'n.
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_10_03
I and the boys return to the camp.
I and the boys are returning to the camp.
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_10_02
I return to the camp!
I'm returning to the camp!
___________________________________
Brandon
DIA_Addon_Brandon_Hello_04_02
Arn't you a little dry for a pirate.
Aren't you a little dry for a pirate?
DIA_Addon_Brandon_WannaLearn_04_02
However why should I do that?
But why should I do that?
DIA_Addon_Brandon_HoleGrog_04_08
I LOVE this Devil brew!
I LOVE this devil brew!
DIA_Addon_Brandon_TeachPlayer_Back_04_00
Good, boy! You've already grown quite a bit stronger.
Good boy! You've already grown quite a bit stronger.
DIA_Addon_Brandon_GoHome_04_02
Perhaps we'll drink once together again.
Perhaps we'll drink together once again.
DIA_Addon_Brandon_TooFar_04_01
We go back into the camp.
Let's get back to the camp.
DIA_Addon_Brandon_TooFar_04_02
I go back into the camp.
I'm going back to the camp.
DIA_Addon_Brandon_Anheuern_04_04
For me, the sooner we get rid of the Beast, the sooner we can get back here again.
Beast => beast (singular?)
_______________________________________
Owen
DIA_Addon_Owen_Perm_13_01
If I'd known all this before, I would've never turned pirate.
turned => become a
DIA_Addon_Owen_MalcomStunt_13_02
We were attacked by one of those Lurker critters.
Lurker => lurker
DIA_Addon_Owen_MalcomStunt_13_05
Malcom faught it and then fell into the hole back there, together with the beast.
faught => fought
DIA_Addon_Owen_MalcomStunt_13_06
There seems to be water down there.
seems => seemed
{ Confused... past tense, past tense, PRESENT TENSE, past tense, past tense ... }
DIA_Addon_Owen_runter_15_00
How could I get down that crevice?
%
DIA_Addon_Owen_runter_13_01
Who knows. I guess climbing or jumping are your only options.
knows. => knows?
___________________________________
Malcom the walking dead
DIA_Addon_Malcom_Lager_04_04
The tress around here are bloody resilient.
tress => trees
DIA_Addon_Malcom_Hello_04_01
You are not from around here, are you?
from around here => from here
DIA_Addon_Malcom_Hello_04_02
You seem to have travelled quite a bit to get here.
??? travelled quite a bit?
DIA_Addon_Malcom_WasMachen_04_04
He is standing in front of the camp and holds little speaches all the time.
holds little speaches => holding little speeches
_______________________________________
Patrick
DIA_Addon_Patrick_Plan_07_01
Just ensure that the guards don't attack us and we'll be out of here.
Just ensure the guards don't attack us and we'll be out of here.
DIA_Addon_Patrick_ready_15_02
Leave the swamp towards the southwest. The water mages struck camp at the old temple ruins there.
struck camp => struck their camp
DIA_Addon_Patrick_Killer_07_01
And what happens when we leave the mine? The other guards will cut us down where we stand. No way. Far too risky.
{ Can I rid the "where we stand"? Redundant. }
DIA_Addon_Patrick_Hoehle_07_01
Sure we do. We are just waiting for more opportune moment.
{ Didn't find an error; just found that "opportune moment" is weird; not a normal person would say. }
Last edited by Kiwi Boy on Tue Aug 24, 2004 8:11 am; edited 1 time in total |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 5:17 am |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
Hammer, Saw, and Bones:
Hammer Pirate
DIA_Addon_HammerPirate_Success_07_02
I go once again to the camp. We see ourselves!
I'm going back to the camp. See you soon!
{ Or "I'm back to the camp once again! See you soon!" Dunno ...... }
#I'm going back to the camp. We'll see for ourselves!
__________________________________
Saw Pirate
DIA_Addon_SawPirate_GoHome_09_02
That just pisses me off. I will once again return back.
That just pisses me off. I'm going back again once again.
#That just pisses me off. I'm going back home to work.
____________________________________
Bones
DIA_Addon_Bones_Hello_01_01
Oh well, I get along ok. It's a little boring, but at least I don't have to work.
ok => well
#Oh, I get along OK. It's a little boring, but at least I don't have to work.
DIA_Addon_Bones_Work_01_04
#No offense, kid. I've worked long and hard for the privilege of this job, and have no desire to lose it.
{ Not sure if "privilege" is the right word. Maybe [privilege => honour to take]? }
[I would leave it. Privilege does mean 'honor, prestige'. It may sound odd to you?, but not to me, and it keeps the flow of the sentence. Privilege is that Bones had to be given that job, to earn that position, it is the most correct word to use over Honor, or Prestige.]
DIA_Addon_Bones_Francis_01_05
Of Greg, he does give a damn. Whoever doesn't step to it, gets a kick in the ass!
???
['step to it' is more slang. = get with it -as get to work or jump to his orders. It goes back to when soldiers 'step' march in line during war under a captain's orders.]
[Either leave it as is, or the alternate without slang...]
@Now Greg, he does give a damn. Whoever doesn't follow orders, gets a kick in the ass!
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_15_00
Give me the bandit armor.
bandit armor => Bandit's Armor
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_01_01
I'm not crazy yet. Greg would tear my head off.
get rid of "yet"
[Bones (an old man) is trying to say he is not 'old yet' as in senile crazy]
#I'm not senile yet. Greg would tear my head off.
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_01_02
He specifically said that without his command no one gets the armor.
He said specifically: Without his command, no one will ever get the armor.
#He said specifically: Without his command, no one gets the armor.
DIA_Addon_Bones_WantArmor_01_03
I can not give it to you. Especially not now as he is back.
can not => cannot
[That form is rarely used in English around here; it is either can not, or can't. But maybe other parts of the English world use it more. I would go for *can't* to avoid it.]
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 8:08 am |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
[That form is rarely used in English around here; it is either can not, or can't. But maybe other parts of the English world use it more. I would go for *can't* to avoid it.]
I've just done a search at my local newspaper with the term "can not". Only two results came up. "cannot" gave me several thousands hits.
0330 here... =/ Monty, Tonak, Telbor, Pardos, and more Patrick next. |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 8:17 am |
|
|
Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
Random, Roast, and Bench Pirates and Matt:
_______________________________
Random Pirate Number 7
__________________________________
Random Pirate Number 6
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_GimmeGrog_DontHaveAny_06_00
Shit, I will die of thirst yet.
Shit, I'm gonna die of thirst.
#Shit, I will die of thirst yet.
[More slang. it is an expression. I would leave it as original. He really is not going to die from no *water* to drink, he just want a beer to drink real bad.]
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_SeichtesWasser_06_01
I must attend to the gluttonous crew here.
I must meet the gluttonous crew here.
#I must attend to the gluttonous crew here.
[Use the original, he is a waiter, cook (water boy). He must *cater* to the hungry crew.]
DIA_Addon_PIR_6_SeichtesWasser_06_02
That's why I stand here all day and night, roasting wolf.
That's why I'm standing here all day long, roasting wolf.
[Actually, another slang expression "all day and night long" to be more exact]
__________________________________
Bench Pirate
___________________________________
Roast Pirate
None!
___________________________________
Matt
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_07_03
I and the boys return to the camp!
I and the boys are returning to the camp!
{ "The boys and I" ?? }
[If you like, yes.]
DIA_Addon_Matt_Hello_10_01
New here, huh? Good. We can use each man we can get!
{ each => every ? }
[Yes]
DIA_Addon_Matt_Job_10_03
For the moment it is quiet in the camp. Now I can relax for awhile.
for awhile => for a while
['awhile' is a real word in the dictionary, as is 'a while'. I always use awhile.]
DIA_Addon_Matt_TooFar_10_01
You can continue from here alone, (cynical) Capt'n.
Starting from here, you can move on by yourself, (cynical) Capt'n.
[Whatever you like, you understand what he means]
@From here on out, you can go on by yourself, (cynical) Capt'n.
___________________________________
Brandon
DIA_Addon_Brandon_Anheuern_04_04
For me, the sooner we get rid of the Beast, the sooner we can get back here again.
Beast => beast (singular?) [beast] plural. It is both. = critters
_______________________________________
Owen
DIA_Addon_Owen_Perm_13_01
If I'd known all this before, I would've never turned pirate.
turned => become a
[became a]
DIA_Addon_Owen_MalcomStunt_13_06
There seems to be water down there.
seems => seemed
{ Confused... past tense, past tense, PRESENT TENSE, past tense, past tense ... }
[yeah, but does not matter much. Use *Seemed* as you indicate]
___________________________________
Malcom the walking dead
DIA_Addon_Malcom_Hello_04_01
You are not from around here, are you?
from around here => from here
#You're not from around here, are you?
[More slang. Keep the phrase together. It means you are not from here, or close by communities, that are 'around' that spot].
DIA_Addon_Malcom_Hello_04_02
You seem to have travelled quite a bit to get here.
??? travelled quite a bit?
[ Yep, more slang, shorter to say. It * travelled quite a bit* = *travelled from quite far away* or " travelled quite some distance*]
DIA_Addon_Malcom_WasMachen_04_04
He is standing in front of the camp and holds little speaches all the time.
holds little speaches => holding little speeches
_________________
Wo ist mein Sumpfkraut? |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 8:43 am |
|
|
Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
|
Just a comment before I sleep.
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
DIA_Addon_Matt_Job_10_03
For the moment it is quiet in the camp. Now I can relax for awhile.
for awhile => for a while
['awhile' is a real word in the dictionary, as is 'a while'. I always use awhile.]
"Awhile" is an adverb. It is never preceded by any preposition.
quote:
Originally posted by Xerxes712
DIA_Addon_Owen_Perm_13_01
If I'd known all this before, I would've never turned pirate.
turned => become a
[became a]
"I would have became"? |
|
Tue Aug 24, 2004 8:47 am |
|
|
|
Goto page Previous 1, 2, 3 ... 5, 6, 7 ... 10, 11, 12 Next
All times are GMT. The time now is Sat Apr 13, 2019 2:22 pm
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
