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Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
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Xerxes712: Really, thanks for your help. But those are your earlier corrections... Yup, that's why.  The rest is in my computer. My webspace is down at this moment so I can't upload anything.
quote:
Originally posted by Gorath
"permission" should be singular, I think. At least in German it should be collective singular.
permission n [U] ~ (to do sth) act of allowing sb to do sth; consent (Oxford)
I should have checked the dictionary in the first place...
@Gorath: Can we re-compile the GothicStarter source code but with English text?
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Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
OK, that is good!
Here is another.
DIA_Addon_KDW_1403_Myxir_NW.d
func void DIA_Addon_Myxir_Steintafeln_Info ()
B_LogEntry (TOPIC_Addon_Stoneplates,"The stone tablets contains the knowledge of the ancient folk of the builders. Some of them magically increase the knowledge of battle and magic. But you need to be able to decipher them.");
contains => contain
The 'ancient folk of the builders' was refering to the ancient people who built the ruins. It can be simply the ancients, ancient builders, or ancient lore of the builders. The next sentence needs the subject restated, it refers to the stone tablets, not the ancient people. So I propose...
#The stone tablets contain the knowledge of the ancient lore of the builders. Some of the tablets can magically increase your knowledge of battle and magic. But you will need to be able to decipher them.
or
# The stone tablets contain the knowledge of the ancients. Some of the tablets can magically increase your knowledge of magic and combat skill. But you will need to be able to decipher them.
Anyway, I spent a couple of months away from the project because quite frankly I was bored and needed another diversion for a time. I can supply corrected sentences, but I have no idea how to use the German Gothic 2 starter kit to place them in the Mod. Once people as you and others find mistakes, it is good since having a hundred people looking it over is better than only one pair of tired eyes. 
Update: I see that is a LOG ENTRY so it may read better as:
# The stone tablets contain the knowledge of the ancients. Some of the tablets can magically increase my knowledge of magic and combat skill. But I will need to be able to decipher them.
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Gorath
Mostly Harmless
Joined: 03 Sep 2001
Posts: 6327
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quote:
Originally posted by Kiwi Boy
@Gorath: Can we re-compile the GothicStarter source code but with English text?
Not my thing to decide. You could ask NicoDE if he would either allow it or recompile it himself if you give him the English text.
edit: The readme says itīs public domain. It includes the source. I would say the changes should be unproblematic at least for internal use. Just donīt put it on a server.
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Thu Aug 12, 2004 2:54 am |
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Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
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<post has been cleared> Visit the first post for Saturas' dialogue.
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Thu Aug 12, 2004 2:55 am |
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Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
Garrett is the proper spelling. I listed some proposed corrections to Fisk's dialog.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Inspektor_DontBelieve_12_01
Believe what you want! But I warn you: If you have in mind to tell Esteban lies about me, then I'll kick your ass!
Believe whatever you want! But let me warn you: Reveal anything about me to Esteban, and I'll kick your ass!
#Believe what you want! But I warn you: If you think to tell lies about me to Esteban, I'll kick your ass!
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_12_03
So he can collect his portion from every trade and so he controls the whole camp.
... so he can collect his commission from every trade and control the whole camp.
?... so he can collect his extortion from every trade and control the whole camp.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_You_12_01
No, I惴 only a merchant - I only want no interference in my buisness.
No. See, I'm only a merchant. I don't want to have any interference in my business.
#No. See, I'm only a merchant - I only want to be left alone.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_now_12_03
#Then we have to kill them, and the truth will die with them.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_now_15_04
#What truth?
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_now_12_05
You did your Job. You know, that I惴 behind the assassination.
First, continue with your task. You know: that I'm behind the assassination.
?You did your job well. You know that I'm the one behind the assassination.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_now_12_06
Tell that Esteban and he will send his guys to kill me. I will await them here.
Tell that to Esteban and he will send his guys to kill me. I will wait here.
#Tell that to Esteban and he will send his guys to kill me. I will wait for them here.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Sieg_15_00
Esteban was cut off.
I killed Esteban.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Sieg_12_01
On that i waited for a long time.
#I've waited a long time to hear that.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Sieg_12_02
I think you have enough to do and I must take care about my business again.
... I must stay in my business again.
?I think you have enough to do, and I must get back to my business.
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Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
Snarf
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Cook_15_00
Wich tasty meal do you have?
Do you have any tasty meal?
#Do you have any tasty meals?
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Cook_HAMMER_01_01
A sauce from a very strong drink. I get the recipe from a guy called Lou.
... I got the recipe from Lou.
#A sauce made from a very strong drink. I got the recipe from a guy named Lou.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Cook_HAMMER_01_02
Obtain the ingredients and bootleg the booze in the lab above, then create the sauce. What do you think?
#Obtain the ingredients, make the booze in the lab upstairs, and create the sauce. What do you think?
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Booze_01_02
Now you can taste one portion. That gives you a strong arm.
One portion?
#Now you can enjoy one portion. It will put muscle on your arms, making you stronger.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Attentat_YouBeingMe_01_05
The interesting Question is: How your odds are, to find the employer.
However, the final question is: How likely will you find the employer?
#However, the real question is: What are the odds you'll find the employer?
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Daedalus
High Emperor
Joined: 04 Jan 2002
Posts: 2516
Location: Estonia |
ouch pretty many mistakes and respelling  good work those bugs needs to be fixed indeed right away |
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Thu Aug 12, 2004 12:19 pm |
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DA UNDERTAKER
souls will cry
Joined: 02 Jun 2004
Posts: 824
Location: Athens, Greece |
well i agree, too many mistakes |
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Thu Aug 12, 2004 2:58 pm |
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Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
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@Xerxes712. Your entries are up now. Please tell me if I missed anything. |
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Sat Aug 14, 2004 1:42 am |
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Whailor
Most Exalted Highlord
Joined: 07 Jul 2003
Posts: 423
Location: Tallinn, Estonia |
I've copied the text file to my HD and am editing it. Basically, I am going through it and adding/changing the lines, my comment start with "Whailor:" (no quotes) and then the text. I'll send it to you as soon as I'm done with it. I am not doing detailed overhaul though, I am changing or adding the things/lines/text, which gets in the eye right away, some lines need a bit more scrutiny, though, if I get around those, I'll check them too
And, of course, some native english speaking person should after this just review the text I added, to make sure it has proper grammar and all that
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Sat Aug 14, 2004 2:47 am |
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Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
Posts: 1086
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Thanks so much Whailor.
I'm reading over Saturas' speech right now. Huge but crazy stuff.
And yes, really hope any native English speaker would participate. Any lurkers here, I beg you, read over the file and post corrections, please.
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Sat Aug 14, 2004 3:23 am |
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Xerxes712
High Emperor
Joined: 01 Nov 2002
Posts: 605
Location: Uber die Welt |
Here is corrections to Huno.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Abwimmeln_06_01
What do you waiting for? Go to the pub!
What are you waiting for? Move your ass to the pub!
#What are you waiting for? Get your ass to the pub!
DIA_Addon_Huno_Hi_15_00
On the face of it, you handle your handcraft.
At first glance, you seem to handle your handcraft very well.
#By the looks of it, you seem to know your craft quite well.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_01
At the day the barrier falls, chaos burst out.
falls => fell
#On the day the barrier fell, all hell broke loose.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_02
some hidden themselfs - others fled and everything were plundered.
Some hid themselves, and others fled from the chaos. Everything else were plundered.
#Some hid themselves, others fled from the chaos - the whole place was plundered.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_05
I was struck by a damn lightning! It seems to me, that I can hear it still ...
... Even now I can still hear it ...
#It seemed as if I was struck by some kind of damn lightning! Even now I can still hear it ...
DIA_Addon_Huno_Armor_06_01
Well - you can get it. That it is so expensive, thatīs Estebans fault.
Well, you can get it. It's really expensive though, and that's Esteban's fault.
#Well, you can buy it. It's really expensive though, and that's Esteban's fault.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Attentat_06_02
And why do you come with it to me?
Then why do you come here?
#Then why do you come here and bother me with it?
DIA_Addon_Huno_Attentat_15_03
I tought, you something about it.
I thought you know something about it.
#I thought you may know something about it.
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_15_05
Paul said, you would hate Esteban.
Paul said, you are harbouring a grudge against Esteban.
#Paul said, you carry a grudge against Esteban.
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_06_06
(dangerous) so? Did he? something else?
(dangerous) Well, did he? Anything else?
#(dangerous) Did he now? So what? Anything else?
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_06_11
(he threatens)Perhaps I should talk to him as well. I am certain, AFTERWARDS he maintains exactly the opposite!
#(he threatens) Perhaps I should talk to Paul as well. I'm certain, after I finish with him, he will claim the exact opposite!
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_Contra_06_03
I guess, that Esteban has intercepted it, to sell it more expensive to me later.
I guess that Esteban has intercepted it and will sell it to me for a steeper price.
#I guess that Esteban has intercepted it, in order to sell it to me later at a higher price.
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_TellMeNow_06_04
(sigh) Very well then! I will bring you and the employer together. But it will happen, how I want it, understand?
(sighs) ... But I'll do whichever way I want it, understand?
#(sigh) Very well then! I'll set up a meeting between you and the employer. But it will happen the way I say so, understand?
DIA_Addon_Huno_Paket_06_04
You are okay. If Iīm honest, I hadnīt expect that from you.
... To be honest, I didn't expect that from you.
#You're okay. To be honest, I didn't expect that from you.
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Kiwi Boy
High Emperor
Joined: 03 Jan 2003
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Your entries are updated. Thanks Xerxes712.  Again, if I missed something, please reply.
Just added Saturas' dialogues and Snaf's as well. Don't stress yourself for this though.
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Decline
Village Dweller
Joined: 03 Aug 2004
Posts: 12
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Here are my corrections to your list of dialogue typos in OU.CSL
It's too long for one post (the thing times out), so I split it into two parts.
My corrections are on the line below yours, and begin with my username
Example - DECLINE: (Error and Correction goes here)
Any general comments, explanations, etc. are surrounded by those funny blocky perentheses: [ ]
I corrected grammar and spelling mistakes, along with smaller stylistic changes. In a couple cases, I rewrote entire sentences.
Here's my corrections:
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Dialogue typos found in OU.CSL
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Huno
DIA_Addon_Huno_Abwimmeln_06_01
What do you waiting for? Go to the pub!
What are you waiting for? Move your ass to the pub!
DECLINE: Move => Get
DIA_Addon_Huno_Hi_15_00
On the face of it, you handle your handcraft.
DECLINE: It would appear that you know your craft quite well.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Hi_15_02
Steel? no, I think you mistake me with someone else ...
no => No
DECLINE: you mistake me => you've mistaken me
DIA_Addon_Huno_Hi_JA_06_03
A few. Some fled with Raven like me. A lot of guys find their death at the camp.
A few. Some like me fled with Raven. Many other people found their death at the camp.
DECLINE: Some like me fled with Raven. => Some, like me, fled with Raven.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Hi_NO_06_01
Hm ... I have a head like a sieve ... the heck with it ...
DECLINE: I can filter it out in my head. ... The heck with it. [Not sure about this one.]
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_01
At the day the barrier falls, chaos burst out.
DECLINE: The day the barrier fell, all hell broke loose.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_02
some hidden themselfs - others fled and everything were plundered.
DECLINE: Some hid themselves, most tried to flee from the chaos - the whole place was plundered.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_04
I tried to escape from the camp, as it became suddenly bright and a torrid pain comes trough my skin.
I tried to escape from the camp. But suddenly, a bright and torrid pain pierced through my skin.
DECLINE: pierced through my skin. => coursed through my body.
DIA_Addon_Huno_Attentat_15_03
I tought, you something about it.
I thought you know something about it.
DECLINE: thought => think
DIA_Addon_Huno_Blitz_06_05
I was struck by a damn lightning! It seems to me, that I can hear it still ...
DECLINE: I'd been struck by damn lightning! Even now, I can still hear that intense ringing in my ears when it happened.
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_15_03
I have heard, you were not on your position, as the assassination happens!
From what I've heard, during the assassination, you were away from your job.
DECLINE: job => post
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_15_05
Paul said, you would hate Esteban.
Paul said, you are harbouring a grudge against Esteban.
DECLINE: said, you are => said you're
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_06_11
(he threatens)Perhaps I should talk to him as well. I am certain, AFTERWARDS he maintains exactly the opposite!
DECLINE: Perhaps I should have a chat with him as well. He won't be telling you anything after that, I'm sure.
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_Contra_06_02
I wait to long for the steel delivery of the pirates.
The steel delivery from the pirates ... I've been waiting for too long.
DECLINE: for too long => too long for that.
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_Contra_06_09
You will have to search in the sump for him.
You'll have to serach for him in the swamp.
DECLINE: serach => search [Just making sure you notice your typo.]
DIA_Addon_Huno_SomeThings_TellMeNow_06_05
Go to the pub talk to the bartender. The next steps he will tell you.
Go to the pub and talk to the bartender. He'll show you the next steps.
DECLINE: steps => step
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Fisk
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_12_02
All Bandits, who works for me, he doensīt let go into the mine. He make sure, that ALL work for him - only for him.
He doesn't let any of my bandits in the mine. He makes sure EVERYONE in the mine is working for him - only for him...
DECLINE: for him - only for him ... => for him, and only for him.
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_12_03
So he can collect his portion from every trade and so he controls the whole camp.
Xerxes712: ... so he can collect his extortion from every trade and control the whole camp.
DECLINE: ... so he can collect => That way, he can collect... [Splitting a sentence between entries 12_02 and 12_03 might be a little confusing, so I broke them up into individual sentences.]
DIA_Addon_Fisk_Meeting_You_12_01
No, Iīm only a merchant - I only want no interference in my buisness.
Xerxes712: No. See, I'm only a merchant - I only want to be left alone.
DECLINE: only => just
DIA_Addon_Fisk_GivePicks_15_00
Here you have a dozen picklocks ...
DECLINE: Here is a dozen lockpicks ...
DIA_Addon_Fisk_PaketOpen_12_02
Do you have at least the picklocks ?
DECLINE: Do you at least have the lockpicks?
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SNAF
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Attentat_YouBeingMe_01_01
I would try to remind, what you know about the employer.
DECLINE: I think we should review what you know about the employer.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Abrechnung_01_06
It seems that Finn is very excited, since you talked to him.
DECLINE: It seems Finn's been very excited ever since you talked to him.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Abrechnung_01_10
But the risk exists, that we will run to Esteban - (ironical ) but you know that yourself.
DECLINE: But there's still the risk that we will run into Esteban ... (ironicaly) but you already knew that.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Abrechnung_01_12
I donīt know what you are up to, but the man you are looking for, will now be more careful.
I don't know what you're up to; however, from now on, the man you're looking for will be more careful.
DECLINE: however, from now on, => but, from now on
DIA_Addon_Snaf_Abschied_01_15
(craggy )Hey! I told you nothing, that you didnīt know before, understand?
DECLINE: Hey, I haven't told you anything you didn't already know, right?
DIA_Addon_Snaf_People_01_02
Every Information cost a little amount.
DECLINE: Each piece of information will cost you a little.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_People_Paul_01_01
I think, es doesnīt like Esteban very much. Since he works for Huno, he doesnīt come any longer into the mine.
DECLINE: I don't think he likes Esteban. Since he works for Huno, he's no longer allowed in the mine.
DIA_Addon_Snaf_People_Senyan_01_01
Senyan is one of Estebans guys. He works awhile for him.
Esteban's ... He's been working for him for awhile.
DECLINE: awhile => a while ['Awhile' is never preceded by a preposition like 'for'. A dumb quirk of the english language.]
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DIA_Addon_Martin_GotRangar_15_01
It's Rangar who tamper with your stock.
temper => tempered
DECLINE: tempered => tampered [Another typo I'm bringing to your attention.]
DIA_Addon_Quarhodron_Hello_frech_11_01
A man of your standing does not adress me like this.
adress => address
DECLINE: does not => should not
DIA_Addon_Quarhodron_GibMirKey_11_11
(half faded voice) My strength is dwindling. Farewell. We shall meat again in the realm of the dead ...
meat => meet
DECLINE: (half faded voice) => (faint voice) [To match a change in another dialogue]
DIA_Addon_Ramon_FirstWarn_15_13
Franco sent me. He's like to know if new workers are requested.
DECLINE: Franco sent me. He wants to know if you need any new workers.
DIA_Addon_Riordian_FoundAllHouses_10_03
Very well. Then my work was worthwile.
worthwile => worthwhile; well. Then => well, then
DECLINE: ["worthwile => worthwhile" is the only change you should make.]
DIA_Addon_Riordian_FoundHouse_10_14
Is that region not abnormal for that animals?
DECLINE: Is it normal to find such animals in that region?
DIA_Addon_Franco_JemandAnderen_15_00
WhatĄĶs about the camp? Can i get finally in?
DECLINE: What about the camp? Can I finally get in?
DIA_Addon_Franco_While_08_03
(extremely friendly) You want some Gold pieces? Sure, how much do you want? Fifty Goldnuggets? Hundred? I give you as much gold as you can carry ...
Gold => gold, Goldnuggets => gold nuggets;
DECLINE: Hundred? I give you => A hundred? I'll give you
DIA_Addon_Riordian_Gegend_sued_15_00
Where I arrive, if I go to the south?
Where I => Where should I
DECLINE: should => would ; go => went
DIA_Addon_Riordian_HelloADW_10_03
Thousends have been live here.
DECLINE: Thousands used to live here.
DIA_Addon_Senyan_Attentat_12_08
Always keep in mind that I've got your wanted poster. Do you job and do it well. You can guess what happens otherwise.
"Always keep in mind that I've got your wanted poster. So do your job and do it well. Otherwise, you can see what will happen."
DECLINE: you can see => you'll see
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_Raven_14_01
In Ravens letter they talked about a temple and that he triesto get in.
Ravens => Raven's; triesto => tries to
DECLINE: tries to get in. => has been trying to get into.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_Raven_14_02
???We are of one voice, that it could be a temple of Adanos, and Raven tries to desecrate it.
DECLINE: All of us are convinced it is a temple of Adanos, and if Raven gains entry, it will be desecrated.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_Raven_14_04
The Gates of the temple are clossed by magic and exactly this spell resurrect the stoneguardians.
DECLINE: The same magic that has sealed the gates of the temple, has resurrected the stone guardians.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_RavenAim_15_00
What is Raven up to in the temple?
Why is Raven so eager in the temple?
DECLINE: in => to enter
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_back_14_04
We guess, the bandits attack everything, that does not look like them.
DECLINE: We're guessing the bandits will attack anyone who doesn't look like them.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_was_15_00
What happens in the meantime?
DECLINE: What has happened here in the meantime?
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_was_14_01
We find a lot of perceptions.
DECLINE: We've made a number of discoveries.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_was_14_02
The earthquakes seem to become more STRONG. We are no longer far away from their center.
DECLINE: The earthquakes are getting stronger. I suspect we are near their source.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_was_14_03
The builders of these old constructions had established here a city earlier, that we discover so far.
DECLINE: Centuries ago, the ruins around us were once a great city, established by an ancient people. [Since the "old constructions" *are* the city, it seems odd to say it that way.]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_was_14_04
For any reason their culture was destroyed.
any => some
DECLINE: Mysteriously, their entire civilization was destroyed.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_was_14_05
At the moment we could only speculate why.
DECLINE: Why this happened is not yet known. At the moment, we can only speculate.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ADWStart_wastun2_14_06
Only if we see trough Ravens plans, we could thwart them.
DECLINE: If only we knew Raven's plans, we could stop him.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_AdanosZorn_14_03
Rhademes, the Son of the commander Quahodron, desecrate the temple.
DECLINE: Rhademes, son of the war hero Quahodron, desecrated the holy temple.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_AdanosZorn_14_04
one by one lapsed into the evil.
DECLINE: One by one, the ancient people fell to evil.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_AdanosZorn_15_00
What happend that Adanos become such angry?
DECLINE: What happened when Adanos became so enraged? [Possibly: "What caused Adanos to become so angry?"]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_BeliarsWeapon_besser_14_03
If you put hin into rage, then he will let you feel that.
DECLINE: Should you anger him, you will feel it.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_BeliarsWeapon_geben_14_03
If you give it to me,I will make it unusable, so that nobody can abuse it anymore.
DECLINE: Give it to me so that I can make it unusable for any foul purpose.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_Hallo_14_02
(annoyed) But tell me. Do we know eachother? Of course. You son of a bitch ...
DECLINE: (annoyed) But tell me: Do I know you? ... Of course. You son of a bitch! [Slightly neater formatting.]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_Hallo_14_03
(annoyed) Don't think, that we have forgotten that you betrayed us in the New Camp then.
DECLINE: Don't think that we haven't forgotten how you betrayed us at the New Camp.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_LanceLeiche_14_02
Take care, my son. I don't want to deplore another Loss of this kind.
DECLINE: Take care, my son. I deplore the thought of another such loss.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_Lares_15_02
I'm alone. Lares go back to the city again.
DECLINE: I'm alone. Lares has already gone back to the city.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_OpenPortal_14_02
But I still wait for a message of Vatras. Before I didn't receive it, we can't go yet.
DECLINE: I'm waiting for confirmation from Vatras. Until I recieve it, no one goes through the portal.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_OpenPortal_14_06
(threat) I want to hope for you that my very tender confidence in you is not punished.
DECLINE: For your sake, I hope that what little confidence I have in you has not been misplaced.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_OpenPortal_14_10
As long as Vatras does not motion to me that I can trust you, I am keep the ring.
DECLINE: Unless Vatras tells me I can trust you, I shall keep the ring.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_Ornament_15_04
Why you put up a fuss about that old story?
DECLINE: Why are you still fussing about that old story?
DIA_Addon_Saturas_PermENDE_ADDON_14_01
We will be stay here and make sure that the temple will illumine in the old glamor and size.
DECLINE: We shall remain here, illuminating a history that's been long unseen. [I have no clue what the sentence is trying to say, so I wrote a new one to try and get the gist of it.]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_PermENDE_ADDON_14_05
Without your strengh and your bravery the island of Khorinis would be persihed. We thank you and will commemorate your honor.
strengh => strength; your bravery => bravery; persihed => perished
DECLINE: be persihed => have perished ; your honor => what you have done here.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_Piraten_14_02
As far as we know, they have contacts to the bandits
Put a period (.) at the end of each sentence.
DECLINE: to => with
DIA_Addon_Saturas_PoorRanger_15_00
Wich poor sod do you send into the swamp?
Wich => Which
DECLINE: do => did
DIA_Addon_Saturas_RavenInfos_14_18
(excited) What? That is a DISASTER! Why you didn't follow him?!
you didn't => didn't you
DECLINE: That => This
DIA_Addon_BL_BDT_1_Lager_01_01
After it became clear that there is a gold mine here, these vermin whacked each other quite nicely.
DECLINE: After it became clear that there is a gold mine here, => Once it was discovered there was a goldmine here,
DIA_Addon_BL_BDT_1_Lager2_01_02
Unless you have a good reason to go after someone. Then nobody will interfere.
someone. Then => someone, then
DECLINE: Unless => if
DIA_Addon_Saturas_RavenInfos_15_11
He could only tell me, that Raven let excavate the grave of one of Adanos priests.
DECLINE: let excavate => excavated ; Adanos => Adanos'
DIA_Addon_Saturas_RavenInfos_15_15
I invaded Ravens room.
Ravens => Raven's
DECLINE: invaded => infiltrated [Better fitting]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_RavenInfos_15_17
I came to late. He disappears in the Adanostemple right before my eyes.
DECLINE: I was too late. He disappeared into Adanos' Temple right before my eyes.
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Decline
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DIA_Addon_Saturas_RelictsBack_14_05
I'm really sorry, that I can't tell you more. Now all its up to you.
DECLINE: Now all its up to you. => It's all up to you now. [Remove the comma after sorry.]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_ScRanger_14_09
Do you want to kid me? I didn't expexted anything else.
expexted => expect
DECLINE: Do you want to kid me? => Are you trying to kid me?
DIA_Addon_Saturas_StonePlateHint_14_00
Good that you arrive. We have new perceptipons we want to tell you.
DECLINE: It's good that you've arrived. We've made new observations you must know about.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_StonePlateHint_14_02
The lost city carried once the name Jharkendar. There were 5 rulers in this city, which share the disposal of their people.
DECLINE: This lost city was once known as Jharkendar. It was ruled by a council of five members, each with dominion over the people.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_StonePlateHint_14_03
Everyone of this rulers had a manor, in which he lived and where he kept his property.
DECLINE: Each of these rulers resided in a manor, where each kept their property.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_StonePlateHint_unter_15_00
What happens, if there are no of these estates any longer exists?
DECLINE: But, what if some of these estates no longer exist?
DIA_Addon_Saturas_TalkedToGhost_kammern_14_01
We know, that the gate is not the only obstacle, to get inside the temple.
Get rid of the commas.
DECLINE: obstacle, to get inside the temple. => obstacle preventing access to the temple.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_TalkedToGhost_kammern_14_04
Only if we have all relics and solve the riddles on them, we come into inner sanctum of the temple.
we => can we
DECLINE: Only if we => Only once we
DIA_Addon_Saturas_TalkedToGhost_wasistdas_14_02
Everybody, who use it, had a terrible weapon of the destruction.
DECLINE: All who wielded it brought destruction upon the land. [Rewrote the sentence, as was essentially "Everyone who used the weapon, had the weapon," which makes no sense.]
DIA_Addon_Saturas_TalkedToGhost_wasistdas_14_07
Those arrogant fools killed eachother thanks to greed.
DECLINE: Out of greed, those arrogant fools killed each other.
DIA_Addon_Saturas_TalkedToGhost_wasistdas_14_12
Raven is a strong Fighter and blinded from his greed for power.
Fighter => fighter
DECLINE: greed => hunger [or] lust
DIA_Addon_Saturas_GhostQuestions_14_05
Mmh ... we know, that the scholars of this city build a library in the north.
build => built
DECLINE: Mmh => Hmm
DIA_Addon_Saturas_geheimbund_14_01
(furious) WHAT? Wherefrom do you know about that? Who ... ? LARES ... I kill him.
DECLINE: (furious) WHAT? Who told you about that? Who ...? LARES! I'll kill him!
DIA_Addon_Saturas_raus_14_00
Make haste, that get out here, before something is happening to you.
that get out => then get out of
DECLINE: that get out => and get out of ; is happening => should happen
DIA_Addon_Saturas_wasmachstdu_14_01
(awesome) This halls are holding old secrets. mystirious secrets.
This => These; mystirious => Mysterious
DECLINE: (awesome) => (awed)
DIA_Addon_SawPirate_Success_09_02
I go back to the camp. Hopefully we never see each other again!
we => we'll
DECLINE: I go => I'm going
DIA_Addon_Scatty_GruftAgain_01_10
Raven and his guys left the temple shortly afterwards. And hasn't been down here again ever since then.
afterwards. And hasn't => afterwards, and haven't
DECLINE: again ever since then. => since.
DIA_Addon_Cronos_ADWHello_04_05
It does not pass a day, on which we are not attacked by the beasts of this sump.
DECLINE: Not a day has passed without an attack by the beasts in this swamp.
DIA_Addon_Cronos_WaechterADW_04_02
They stand as if they are a pillar of salt and don't bestir themself.
DECLINE: They stand completely still, as if they're nothing more than an old pile of rocks.
DIA_Addon_Cronos_WaechterADW_04_03
Appearances are deceiving. If you get to close, they will attack you!
to => too
DECLINE: Appearances => But, appearances [To link it to the prior dialogue.]
DIA_Addon_Cronos_WaechterADW_04_04
There is no doubt, the source of their power must be around here somewehre.
DECLINE: I have no doubt that the source of their power is nearby.
DIA_Addon_Cronos_Hallo_04_01
(amazed ) There YOU are. I didnīt intend, that I would set my eyes on you again.
(amazed ) => (amazed)
DECLINE: I didn't intend, => I never thought
DIA_Addon_Cronos_Hallo_04_02
You are very courageously to show your face again. There were times, we would have flay you.
courageously => courageous; flay => flayed
DECLINE: times, we => times when we
DIA_Addon_Cronos_Hallo_04_03
You can be glad that that its already a few weeks ago and everyone could calm down again.
DECLINE: You should be glad a few weeks have passed, and tempers have cooled.
DIA_Addon_Cronos_Waechter_04_03
We could defeat it only with united forces and Iīworry about that behind the portal still more of them waiting for us.
DECLINE: We were only barely able to defeat them, and I'm worried that more of them await us on the other side of the portal.
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_ADWHello_05_00
It appease myself, that you arrive safely.
DECLINE: It appease myself => I am glad ; arrive => have arrived
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_05_01
I study the history of the builders and try to understand, why they have locked the portal.
have locked => locked
DECLINE: Move the comma to after "builders".
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_05_02
It looks like, as if they wanted to hide the lost city for the rest of the world.
for => from
DECLINE: like, as if => as if
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_05_04
If believe in their recordings, then before the city were doomed there was a dreadful civil war.
DECLINE: If my translations are correct, the the city fell into ruin during a dreadful civil war.
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_was_15_00
What does upset the builders?
DECLINE: does upset => upsets
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_was_05_01
Someone of their own ranks commit himself to the evil. He was a great commander called Quahodron.
commit => committed
DECLINE: Someone => One
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_auf_05_01
I feel below par, you can belief that.
belief => believe
DECLINE: below par, you => ill, if you
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_Neues_auf_05_02
But what a choice do we had?
DECLINE: But what choice did we have?
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_keineahnung_15_00
What thats for a portal?
DECLINE: [I think it's either, "Is that the portal?" or, "Is that for the portal?" but I can't remember where it's spoken, so I'm not sure.]
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_keineahnung_05_01
We assume that it leads into the lost valley, in which the old culturemust build their city .
DECLINE: We assume => We're assuming ; the old culturemust build => the ancient culture built
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_WhyPortalClosed_05_01
Whoever did this, wanted to prevent that the portal would ever activated again.
DECLINE: Whoever did this wanted to prevent the portal from being activated again.
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_MissingOrnaments_05_05
Now still two are missing. Perhaps you find them also.
you find => you can find
DECLINE: Now still two are => Two pieces are still
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_MissingOrnaments_05_06
Only one is missing, than we have them all.
than => then
DECLINE: we => we'll
DIA_Addon_Nefarius_RingRitualEnds_05_02
Go to Saturas and let give yourself the ring.
DECLINE: let give yourself => have him give you
DIA_Addon_Myxir_ADWHello_12_02
It's a pity, that their language is as dead as themself.
DECLINE: is as dead as themself. => died alongside them.
DIA_Addon_Myxir_ADWHello_12_06
If I get this right, than they thought, they kept in touch with their ancestors all the time.
than => then
DECLINE: I get => I'm getting ; thought, they kept => believed they could keep
DIA_Addon_Myxir_ADWHello_12_07
For this they make regularly conjurations and rituals, to get a advice or lambencies.
Xerxes712: To do this, they regularly held rituals to conjure up their ancestors, in order to receive enlightened advice.
DIA_Addon_Myxir_ADWHello_wie_15_00
How does this conjurations work?
DECLINE: How did the conjurations work?
DIA_Addon_Myxir_GeistTafel_Khardimon_12_01
Raven had desecrate the grave with his conjuration. Thatīs for sure.
desecrate => desecrated
DECLINE: had => has
DIA_Addon_Myxir_GeistTafel_psi_12_02
The words were more obscure than convincing. It attest from the excessive use of the sump herb, which they smoked.
DECLINE: The words were muddled, and hardly convincing. I attest it to the excessive use of the swampweed they smoked.
DIA_Addon_Myxir_WasMachstDu_12_04
The builderss used stone tablets, in order to circulate their knowledge. Unfortunately many of them broke or were stolen a long time ago.
builderss => builders
DECLINE: tablets, => tablets ; Unfortunately => Unfortunately,
DIA_Addon_Merdarion_FirstFocus_06_02
I have already spoken to the others about it.
get rid of "the"
DECLINE: [Do not get rid of "the".]
DIA_Addon_Merdarion_Teleportstein_06_07
The teleporter stones that we found in Khorinis are.
get rid of "are"
DECLINE: We've found teleporter stones in Khorinis. [Rewritten as the original is just a fragment.]
DIA_Addon_Greg_NW_WhatWantFromSLD_01_02
But those idiots know not anything either.
DECLINE: know not => don't know
DIA_Addon_Greg_NiceToSeeYou_15_00
How du you get here anyway?
DECLINE: du => did
DIA_Addon_Francis_Key_2000Gold_13_05
But hurry, before Greg returns! And not a ord to the others, you hear me?!
DECLINE: a ord => a word
DIA_Addon_Francis_Key_Business_15_03
I found your little den. Your treasure and your payroll. This is your booklet isn't i?
i => it
DECLINE: [Place a comma after "booklet".]
DIA_Addon_AlligatorJack_WasJagen_12_05
Mosst critters around here taste like other people's feet, or are as tough as alligator's meat.
Mosst => Most
DECLINE: alligator's => alligator
DIA_Addon_AlligatorJack_Pirates_12_02
ur flag on the horizon was enough to terrify merchant vessels into submision.
submision => submission
DECLINE: Ur => Our
DIA_Addon_Morgan_Meat_07_05
What, that's all? Did you munch the rest all by yourself? Ah, don't matter ...
DECLINE: Ah, don't matter => Ah, it don't matter ["Doesn't" is correct here, but "don't" feels more piratey]
IA_Addon_Henry_Owen_04_06
They lumbrejack's camp is not far from here, in the basin sout-east.
They => The; sout-east => southeast
DECLINE: lumbrejack's => lumberjack's
DIA_Addon_Henry_CommentFightSkill_04_03
Remember, who parries lives longer!
DECLINE: Remember: He who parries, lives longer!
DIA_Addon_Henry_Palisade_Train_04_06
His deputy is called Fancis.
DECLINE: called Fancis => named Francis
DIA_Addon_Skip_Francis_08_05
His still is in a small cave north of here.
His still is => He's still
DECLINE: ["His still is" is correct: A still is an apparatus for distilling alcohol. You could try "distillery" or "lab" here.]
DIA_Addon_Bill_AngusnHank_03_01
(sighs) I have no idea wher they are - I guess that bandits got them.
wher => where
DECLINE: that => the
DIA_Addon_Bill_FoundFriends_03_03
(hateful) That was those cursed badits!
badits => bandits
DECLINE: That => It
DIA_Addon_Garett_Anheuern_09_00
Don't even think about asking me if I join your boarding aprty.
DECLINE: if I join your boarding aprty. => if I want to join your boarding party.
DIA_Addon_Bones_Francis_01_04
Morgan spends the whole day either lying in bed, or get himself boozed up.
DECLINE: get => getting
DIA_Addon_Bones_GiveArmor_15_00
Greg commands you should give me the bandits' armor.
bandits' armor => Bandit's Armor
DECLINE: should => to
DIA_Addon_Tonak_NW_Hi_03_01
hey, my life-saver! Yes, now it's back to working my finger to the bone.
hey => Hey
DECLINE: finger => fingers [He has more than one, right?]
DIA_Addon_Farim_Landstreicher_Add_11_02
Don't think bad of me, but I haven't got much love for the milita off late.
milita => militia
DECLINE: off => of
DIA_Addon_Pyrokar_MissingPeople_15_00
Some citizens of Khorinis vanished under the strangest cirumstances.
cirumstances => circumstances
DECLINE: Khorinis vanished => Khorinis have vanished.
DIA_Addon_Vatras_TellMe_Philo_05_02
Should one of the two sides prevail it would either result in the loss of freedom or deadbringing chaos.
DECLINE: deadbringing => death-bringing
DIA_Addon_Vatras_TellMe_Konkret_05_04
... there also is someone in this town who even supports these bandits!
DECLINE: ... but there is also someone in this town who is said to support these bandits!
DIA_Addon_Vatras_GuildBypass_WhichGuild_05_02
The milita, the fire mages or the mercenaries at Onar's farm.
milita => militia
DECLINE: [Place a comma after mages.]
DIA_Addon_Bartok_MissingPeople_04_02
A few days ago we two where hanging around in Coragon's tavern and talked about hunting.
where => were
DECLINE: talked => talking
DIA_Addon_Bartok_MissingPeople_such_04_04
The thought that I might stumble over his cold dead body while hunting scares me.
The => They
DECLINE: [No change is needed for this sentence.]
DIA_Addon_Garvell_MissingPeople_more_04_02
The fisherman Farim mentioned something along these lines. His buddy William appearently disappeared.
DECLINE: appearently => has apparently
DIA_Addon_Lares_GetRangerArmor_end_09_05
Adanos, maintain the balance of this world.
maintain => maintains
DECLINE: [No comma.]
DIA_Addon_Lares_OrnamentBringJob_09_01
(pondering) Hmm. No, I think it's better if it's me to bring the amulet. You may join me, however.
Hmm. No, => Hmm, no.
DECLINE: to bring => who delivers
DIA_Addon_Lares_ArrivedPortalInter1_09_00
Now that we're outside the town and nobody to spy on us is around, there's something I'd like to tell you.
nobody to spy => nobody who spies; comma => period
DECLINE: [No change required.]
DIA_Addon_Lares_ArrivedPortalInter2_09_01
It all began ground was trembling like it did way back when the barrier was still up.
Xerxes712: It all started when the ground began trembling, like it did back when the barrier was still up.
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